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EARTHRISE English Logic and Expressionl Advanced
Lesson 2 How do you spend your weekends?
What do you think?
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1 Do you agree with the following opinion?
Children spend too much time online.
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ロYes
ロNo
2 Why or why not?
3 Write down your own idea in about 50 words!
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I agree, becouse I feel I spend too much time online.
Mony children ase phones or compiters to play games and
(catch (ouTube every day. They should study and talk with
thein fam:ly or friends more But 5omme ot them use it as
a study tool. I thint depend on their heart

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・I agree, because I feel I spend too much time online.
→ I agree because I feel I [also] spend too much time online.
※, because：カンマ(,)不要
・Many children use phones or computers to play games and watch YouTube every day.
→ Many children use [their smartphones] or computers to play games and watch YouTube every day.
・〇 They should study and talk with their family or friends more.
・But some of them use it as a study tool.
→ [However,] some of them use [their smartphones or computers] as a study tool.
※But：独立した文の文頭には使わない。They should study …, but I think ….は可能
・I think depend on their heart. ← 意味???
→ I think [they should spend less time online].
ネットを使う時間をもっと少なくするべきだと思います。
※little(形容詞：時間などが短い) －less(比較級：もっと短い)

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