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Jone and Ace shared the house in London.they’re from Australia.On 1969’s Christmas day ,they went to a department store to buy some Christmas present for their families in Australia.The department store was very busy.At there,they found a thing that made them surprised.A baby lion.It was so cute but looked very sad,because it was closed in a small cage.John and Ace felt sorry to the baby lion, and John said to Ace to buy him.
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訳→ 1969年のクリスマス、二人はオーストラリアの家族にクリスマスプレゼントを買うためにデパートに行きました。デパートはとても混雑していましたが、そこで二人が驚いたものを見つけました。それはライオンの赤ちゃんでした。とても可愛かったのですが、小さな檻に閉じ込められていたのでとても悲しそうでした。
解答例→ On Christmas Day, 1969, they went to a department store to buy Christmas presents for their families in Australia. The department store was very crowded, but they found something that surprised them. It was a baby lion. It was very cute, but it looked very sad because it was locked in a small cage.(参考程度に)
添削→ Jone and Ace shared the house in London.they’re from Australia.On 1969’s Christmas day ,they went to a department store to buy some Christmas present for their families in Australia.The department store was very busy.At there,they found a thing that made them surprised.A baby lion.It was so cute but looked very sad,because it was closed in a small cage.John and Ace felt sorry to the baby lion, and John said to Ace to buy him.

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