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Do
you
think it is good thing for. students to hove
port. time jobs?
I think it is good thing for students to have
part time jobs.
1 have two reasons.
help them in the future.
con leorn the important it is t。 money. C
First, experiencing many Jobs can
Second. they
So, I think it is qpod thing for studente to hove port
time jobs.

英語 英検 英検準2級 英作

Answer 1

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文章の初めはFirstly, secondly がいいと思います。Important it is to moneyよりもhow money is important や money is importantの方が自然だと思います。

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