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至急お願いします！！英検についてです
要約問題でYouTubeの英検二級のテンプレである程度かたちを理解しておこうと思ったんですが
1,2枚目の要約か3枚目の要約どちらが英検二級の検定において点数が高いですか？？
無理にかたちを変えすぎないほうがいいのかなって思ったり…本文の言い換えをたくさんしたほうがいいから3枚目のほうがいいのかなって思ったり…難しい型や難しい言い回しして減点されちゃうのもなって考えてます…
採点基準がよくわかりません…3回目なので絶対合格したいです、リスニングやリーディングが苦手なのでライティングでできるだけ高得点を取りたいなって思ってます

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問題文が違うので比較難しいと思うんですが…、

When young people travel, some like to make their schedules, while others
prefer to go without any plans. There are other ways to travel, too. Some of
them choose to join group tours.
Why do they choose group tours? Group tours are popular because all the
arrangements, such as transportation and accommodations, are taken care
of. Travelers don't have to worry about planning, which saves time and effort.
Additionally, these tours provide opportunities to meet new people, make
friends, and share experiences with others. As a result, group tours make
visiting popular sights more convenient and enjoyable with the help of
knowledgeable guides.
However, group tours have some problems. The schedule might be strict,
with little room for flexibility. This can make the trip less enjoyable for some
travelers. Additionally, the pace of the tour could be too fast, preventing
people from doing everything they want. As a result, some people might feel
uncomfortable and not enjoy the trip as much as they had hoped.

1 Some young people choose to join group
tours.
②Joining group tours has benefits, such as
saving time and making friends
③On the other hand, there are also
disadvantages to joining group tours.
4 For example the schedule might be too
strict or the pace of the trip could be very
fast.
(50語)

●以下の英文を読んで、 その内容を英語で要約し、解答欄に記入しなさい。
●語数の目安は45語~55語です。
●解答は、解答用紙の裏面にある英文要約解答欄に書きなさい。 なお、解答欄の外に書かれ
たものは採点されません。
解答が英文の要約になっていないと判断された場合は、0点と採点されることがあります。
英文をよく読んでから答えてください。
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while others may join a gym or take
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people to exercise
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produce CO2 ause traffic jams, so it is good for society when people use bicycles for
commuting to work or going to school.
bad weather
However, it might be difficult to ride a bicycle when it is raining heavily or snowing
some places ould be dangerous to ride, like narrow roads or roads with a lot of traffic. As a
result, accident involving cyclists may occur.
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RK

2級ってこんなのになったんですね。昔から型ハメの英検ですがなかなかなものですね…
要約ですが英語としては2枚目の方が自然に見えると思います。私なら2枚目の方が好印象、レベルが高いなという意味です。
理由は内容が簡潔に表されていると思います。
元の文の特性もありますが、Topic+for+againstの３つで、どこかを長くしようって感じですよね。
ただ言い換えるのじゃなくて大事なところだけをまとめるのが要約ですからね。
あと3枚目は抜く文章ミスったら詰みですよね。
私なら2枚目で、言い換え部分をなるべく違う表現、より簡潔な表現にまとめると思います。