Question

ねこ

英作文の添削お願いします。
テーマは「ソーシャルメディアの人気はいじめを増やすと思うか」です。

I agree with the topic that the popularity of social media like Facebook, Twitter and LINE increases bullying for following two reasons. Firstly, saying something that can hurt other people via social media may be easier than face-to-face communication. Because, many people can’t see other people’s face when they use social media, which may help people speak ill of other people without considering their mind, and which may lead to bullying. Secondly, text messages more often cause misunderstand than saying directly same things. It is hard to feel the tone and facial expression if we just read text messages. It means that it is hard to understand whether other people misunderstand or not. It frequently occurs especially in children’s communications. For these reasons,I think using social media increases bullying, and we have to be careful when telling something via social media in order to avoid hurting other people.

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Sota

いくつかの不自然なポイント、ミスポイントを指摘させていただきます。

”for following two reasons”
➡for the following two reasons（冠詞 the が必要です）

”their mind”は、their feelings（気持ち） が自然。

text messages more often cause misunderstand”　名詞はmisunderstandingsなのでtext messages often cause misunderstandingsとするとよい

最後の文の “telling something via social media”
telling somethingは「告げ口する」的な意味になる
communicating onlineのほうがよい！

こんな感じです。全体的には本当によく書けています！！

ねこ

ありがとうございます！！