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英作文の添削お願いします💦

なきぃ。 関を選び, 二つの理由をあげてあなたの意見を80語から100語の英語で書き
さい。

信:Fyou wene going to start a company what kind of company would you start?

Technology has changed our lives in many ways. What do you think has been the biggest change?

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知 〔例〕 A: Hf 1 were going to start up a
compan* it would be a gaming company. First
of all, table-top games have become really popular
around the world. They are not just board games
or card games. There are many games that
combine a playing board and cards with dice and
role playing. Many people create and sell their
games online through crowd fanding sites. The
second reason why 1 want to start a company that
sells these new, exciting games is because they are
good for learning ngiish. Students can play and
learn at the same time. (97語) B: Technology has
changed our lives in many ways and the biggest
change is in the way we communicate with other
people. Just a few decades ago, people talked on the
phone when they couldnt speak in person. These
days we commnunicate mostly through exchangnng
messages onlhine. It is often said that some young
people 氏el uncomfortable speaking face to face or on
the phone because is much easier to send text
mmessages. Second, communication has become mmuch
faster. The Internet and related technology have
mmade it possible to share information instantly with
people all over the world. (98語)

Answer 1

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ケスト

問題文に2つ理由を挙げてと書かれているのでビミョーですが、
I have two reasons.を2文目に持ってきて、
First reason,→First,
Second reason→Second
とするとより良いと思います

at the smartphone→on the smartphone

I don't know them.のthemが何指してるかわからないので、ここは代名詞に置き換えないほうがいいと思います

最後の文はNow,Internet has become easy〜のほうが今もインターネットが進化しているような感じがしていいと思います

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