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Q Thanks to improvements in information technobay
It is possible to Work outside, the office
Do you think the number of people doing so
will increase in the future.
I think that the number of people doing so will
increase in the future. I have two reasons
Why I think so.
First of all, it allows us to use time
fully, and the number of people
will increase free time, for example, and worker.
Second of all, If we can possible
students'
to work outside the office, we will
not go to the office.
As a result, we can spend time with
family and friends.
This is why I think so more and more
people will work outside the
office.
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