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in their studies.
[5] It is said that famous tourist sites,
should
limit the number of visitors.
I
agree
with this opinion.
I have two reasons why I think so. 31
First, It can protect nature. If the number
of them decreases, garbages will be increased by
th them, and as a result, the place's
charm will become bad. Second, they
saves a lot of time. This is because
they don't have to wait there for a
long time, and by doing so they will
have a good time.
For these reasons that I mentioned,
す
I believe that famous tourist sites,
The number of visitors.
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•should limit

No.
DATE
4]
Some of university students.
choose to Join
Joing
the internships. has benefis,
such as being able to know more to
about companies, and encouraging
each other both during and after
the it. On the other hand, they
may not be able to understand the job.
or may find it difficult to do well
in their studies. 55

Answer 1

ウッズ

よく書けています！採点と添削をしますね。

4.　10点
・1文目、choose to join internshipなどとする
・ableはknowとencourageの両方にかかってるため、to encourageとしてあげる
・the itは、theを消しitのみ

5.　11点
・場所は制限されるものなので、should be limitedとする
・number of them のthemはnature? natureは数えられず、the number ofは可算名詞のみに使うため、a lot of natute などにする
・it save tourists a lot of time と、第四文型をとります
・最後が序論と同じなので、変えることを推奨します。（例えば人を主語にする、単語を変える、など）