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問題
Some people say that playing sports helps children become better people.Do you agree with this opinion?

Yes, 1 do.There are two reasons.Firstitl
enable children to create the strong body
.Ht is the most important thing to live
healthy.Even if they catch a cold,children
who have strong body can recover from
in a short time.Second,they can learn
about the importance of teamwork
Whenever they play sports,it isS necessary
to help each other.Also,they will be
required the skill in the future,so they had
better know the importance of it.
Forthese reasons,|Ithink that playing
sports helps children become better
peoPle.

Answer 1

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やっすー

よく書けてますよ⭕️
流れも自然で言いたいこともわかりやすいですし。

2行目　enable→enables
2行目　create the strong body→train the body
なんかこう体の肉体美を追求するみたいなイメージになりますので体を鍛えるとしました。
7行目　teamwork の後にピリオド抜け

かなり自信持っていいと思いますよ。
今後も頑張ってください💪

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