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英検２級の英作文です。添削をお願いしたいです😿
初めて書いたのでめちゃくちゃかもしれませんが直してくれると嬉しいです🙏

O Q It is sometimes said that all people should be able to
enter museums for free. Do you agree
this opinion?
I don't agree with this opinion that all people should
be able to enter
museums for free.
There are two reasons why I think this way
To begin with if we can enter museums for freeing
the museums won't be able to continue running, 43
In addition, people who want to be artists will
decrease in the future.
Some of the artists
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make
to the museums,
If they can't get the money, they don't want to
be an artists.
we should pay the fee
In conclusion, I think
when we enter museums.
a living to sell the paintings

英検

Answer 1

✨ Best Answer ✨

zmic

上手に書かれていると思います👍おつかれさまです

❌ the people will decrease/increase
✅ the number of people will decrease/increase
✅ In addition, the number of people who want to be/become artists will decrease in the future.

❌ Some of the artists make a living to sell paintings to the museums.
✅ Some of the artists make a living by selling paintings to the museums.

"If they can't get the money, they don't want to be artists"はあまり自然に聞こえません
✅ If they can't make money, they will not want to be artists anymore.

✅ I don't agree with this opinion.
✅ I don't agree with the opinion that <xxx>.
❌ I don't agree with this opinion that <xxx>.
✅ I agree with this opinion.
✅ I agree with the opinion that <xxx>.
❌ I agree with this opinion that <xxx>.
✅ I don't agree with the opinion that all people should be able to enter museums for free.

凛

ありがとうございます😭